Ikari: Chapter 1 by Ben Murray

Word Count: 6079 words | Critique type preference: Online

Content warnings:

Blood, Combat, Death/Dying, Disregard for personal autonomy (kidnapping / enslavement / abduction), Mental Disorders, Violence (gratuitous / extreme)

Author Notes:

Firstly, does it make you want to read chapter 2?
Does it keep you guessing as to whether the protagonist will succeed?
Does the antagonist surprise you in his responses?
I’m trying to minimize exposition; full Frank Herbert style. Does that work or do I need more?

Submitted: 16 July 2025

Last updated: 10 June 2026 at 18:41

Author Email: be********@***il.com