Metrocrone by Eivinas Valaitis
Word Count: 5800 words
Critique Date: 2 June 2026, Online
Author Email: ei******@***il.com
Content warnings:
Blood, Classism, Drug use, Needles, Slurs, Violence (gratuitous / extreme)
Author Notes:
Is there too much exposition of setting up this dystopian world and not enough narrative drive? My biggest fear is that it’s boring. Is there too much purple prose? Should the “Mongers” part be removed? I’m thinking of rewriting the first few chapters entirely so let me know if they have any redeemable qualities
Submitted: 12 May 2026
Last updated: 10 June 2026 at 23:41 by Kat Kourbeti