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Cursed Ground by David Whitmarsh

Word Count: 7165 words

Critique Date: , In Person

Author Email: da*************@******ts.com

Content warnings:

Animal cruelty or death, Blood, Cancer, Death/Dying, Needles, Pregnancy / Childbirth / Miscarriage / Abortion, Vomit

Author Notes:

A rough draft of a story. Some things that I’ve played with that I’m not sure really work, so views welcomed:

Voice
Use of present/past tense to distinguish present/past scenes
World building – is it sufficient to set the scene? Would it be better to stretch it out to a novella by fleshing it out and elaborating some of the story lines
Is there too much telling rather than showing
Does the ending land, is it too brief

Notes to organisers:

I’m away all of August

Submitted: 30 June 2026

Last updated: 30 June 2026 at 11:49 by David Whitmarsh

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